Ill suspicion-Night

[EarlyBird]

I wrote this and Frida liked it alot so thought I'd put it up. If it gets no viewings I will delete it to save space. This is a story based on winters tale slightly. Only by one of the names and the fact he thinks she cheated on him. Otherwise I made it myself. Winters tale was just my inspiration. It's not very long but hope you will like it. I tried to write in a old fashioned kind of style. But that kind of sounded like shakespear. I say kind of cause I only lightly based it. But anyway here it is. And is thy is wrong please tell me what is right. I thought it sounded correct but it may be wrong. Do correct me if it should be something else. And if you find any spelling mistakes. I did check several times. But I may have overlooked something. Dunno if I am going to add to this. It may just be a one off.

Hermione: (sitting on a chair in the corner of the room by a brightly burning fire). Send him in and let us be a while.

Maid: (curtsy’s and exits room).

Hermione: My Lord. What ails you?

John: I was passing by.

Hermione: You look pale. Come now sit by me and tell me what has made you so.

John: I will ask thee one question. One only, and you are to give...an honest answer.

Hermione: Of course My Lord. Ask at will.

John: Has thine eyes wondered to someone other then your good King?

Hermione: I know not what you are suggesting my Lord. For I have only eyes for you.

John: You have not looked upon any other man the way you do your husband?

Hermione: Certainly not.

John: And not let another steal a kiss from thy lips?

Hermione: Never.

John: And not shared thy bed with...

Hermione: My Lord I think you need to rest your head, these are ravings.

John: I have seen the way you flirt with them.

Hermione: With whom?

John: You know too well.

Hermione: I'm sorry Good Sir but I do not.

John: (leans over her, a hand on both arm rests on the chair she's sitting on). You lie.

Hermione: I do not. I never...

John: You think me mad? (recoils)

Hermione: No. I think you are confused.

John: (lifts her chin) Then you say you are but an angel who has done no wrong?

Hermione: I am no angel. I never claimed so.

John: And I asked for an honest answer. But you did not give it to me. (moves away)

Hermione: I did.

John: To bed with you.

Hermione: I am not tired.

John: Then do not sleep. But lie down and shut thine eyes to try.

Hermione: Go to your work.

John: No I shall not.

Hermione: For what reason? Oh...you want to question me?

John: No.

Hermione: Then go. What keeps you here other then accusing your wife?

John: I want to be with you Hermione.

Hermione: You think me plain.

John: I never said you were...

Hermione: You did when you uttered those words to me.

John: I love you. (Takes her hand and kneels in front of her chair)

Hermione: But yet you cannot trust me. So how can you love me?

John: I can.

Hermione: Can you?

John: Yes.

Hermione: Then take your leave. I will ready for bed.

John: I will make sure our little princess is sleeping.

Hermione: (nods and stands up)

John: Hermione, I love you.

Hermione: I love you more then life itself.

John: (goes to check on his daughter then walks back into the room) Let us retire.

Hermione: (gets into bed and looks at her husband)

John: (begins to get ready)

Hermione: (picks up her book and begins to read)

John: (smiles looking back at her)

Hermione: (giggles)

John: To hear you laugh is like sweet music to my ears.

Hermione: Thank you.

John: What is it that made you so happy in that book of yours?

Hermione: When the husband carries his wife over the threshold. Reminds me of when you had done the same with me.

John: I remember.

Hermione: And how (giggles) how you almost dropped me in the fountain on the way.

[biggzy]

Very interesting witchy! u have a certain flair. In two cases - " hast thou eyes wandered", and " lie down and shut thy eyes to try ", you might be happier with the word 'thine'. Also, depending on your time frame, the term " ask away ' may seem a bit too contemporary. No criticisms, mind you, just suggestions. Regards-

[EarlyBird]

Thine, yes that does sound better actually. Thank you. I forgot about that word while writing this. Thanks for reading it and I am glad you found it interesting to read

[Mandy]

I very like it I would like write too,but I can't becoz my not very well english sorry !!!

[EarlyBird]

I am sure you can never give up, and thank you xxx

[biggzy]

Dear Witchy- I certainly dont wish to sound so 'professorial', but since u are a serious student of Shakespearian composition, I thought I'd try to explain the "rules" of usage in those days. 'THY and THINE' meant exactly the same thing [ your ]. The difference was that ' thy ' was always used when the next word started with a consanant [ " thy WILL be done ], while thine always preceded a word starting with a vowel, [ Drink to me only with thine EYES ]. In this sense, it is exactly as we employ the articles A and AN, [ a Potato; an Apple ]. Thou, on the other hand, means YOU, and should not be confused with the others. Anyway, hope this helps you to make the proper selections in your writing, for which I continue to wish you all good luck.
As always, best regards-