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Post by EarlyBird on Sept 25, 2007 16:49:02 GMT 9.5
I was going to do something with the crucible as I see Miranda playing Elizabeth  but when I started it it just seemed crappy to me lol So instead I am going to write the fred claus scene with Mrs claus and everyone featured in the trailer:)Well what I will think the rest would be anyway. Enjoy:)I'm not very good at writing comedy but I thought I'd give it a go Everyone is sat around a table eating Christmas dinner. Mrs Claus is one end and her husband is the other side. Mum: This man can fly around the world in a single night. Nick: (shows his muscles comically). Mum: You amaze me (beams happily to herself). Nick: Thanks mum. But Fred should amaze you too he fails at everything. That in my eyes is an accomplishment. Annette: (rolls her eyes). Fred: Thanks for that bro, I am sure mum and dad were thinking exactly the same thing. Nick: Come on they're proud of you. Aren't you mum? (Looks over at his parents and is greeted by silence). Annette: So... (Trying to change the subject) anyone want more peas? Dad: No thank you. Mum: Oh and by the way. You cook a fabulous Sunday roast my dear. You make us proud. Annette: (blushes and smoothes her hair back away from her face) Thank you. That's very thoughtful of you. Nick: Fred wants to start his own business (randomly). Mum: Really? And what number try is this going to be. Fred: Twenty eight (as if proud). Annette: Everyone done? (walks over and collects the plates). Nick: (horse blows). |
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Post by EarlyBird on Sept 26, 2007 0:44:21 GMT 9.5
Mum: You need some help dear? (To Annette smiling).
Annette: Oh no I think I've got it (collects the plates and hands them to the elf behind her). Thank you.
Elf: (smiles and walks to the kitchen).
Annette: I'll go and start the pudding (smiles and is about to walk through to the kitchen).
Fred: (about to stand) Oh let me help you with that (smiles and knocks over the pea bowl). Oops my bad.
Annette: (rolls her eyes and covers her face taking a deep breath) Nick! (Growls deep in her throat, teeth clenched together. Walks out the door in a fast pace).
Nick: Coming dear... (Gets up and almost knocks over his plate but manages to stop it falling) I'm ok. I'm alright (smiles and follows her). What is it dear? Darling Sweetheart...sugarplum.
Annette: If you think sweet talking me is going to work you are sadly mistaken! (Pointing an accusing finger at her husband).
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Post by mirandathebest on Sept 26, 2007 1:05:12 GMT 9.5
it's really nice Ali!i really like it |
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Post by EarlyBird on Sept 26, 2007 1:07:06 GMT 9.5
:Dthankyou hun
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Post by EarlyBird on Sept 26, 2007 1:18:48 GMT 9.5
Nick: I take it this is about Fred?
Annette: You saw him in there (points towards the door). Just...just sitting there like a lemon. And breaking the china...
Nick: Hay hay give him some slack (puts up his hands as if in defence).
Annette: If we give him anymore 'slack' (uses two fingers on each hand as she says the word). He will end up crashing on our sofa until we are old and grey.
Nick: I'm already old and grey and you well...you're not old...
Annette: And not grey (folds her arms across her chest) If you hadn’t noticed.
Nick: You dye it come on now lets be honest with ourselves (like he is talking to a child).
Annette: I do not dye it! (Angrily and shocked her mouth open slightly) How dare you!
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Post by mirandathebest on Sept 26, 2007 1:30:13 GMT 9.5
really funny!! hehe |
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Post by michaelgiry on Sept 26, 2007 3:06:13 GMT 9.5
Great job!
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Post by EarlyBird on Sept 26, 2007 3:34:43 GMT 9.5
:Dthankies I will add more soon
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Post by aussie_girl95 on Oct 5, 2008 13:19:45 GMT 9.5
it is really good (y)
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Post by EarlyBird on Oct 28, 2008 8:05:58 GMT 9.5
Nick: Hunny...It's time to accept the truth. We're getting older.
Annette: So you think I look old?
Nick: No no no...I meant you are getting old...
Annette: I know my age Nick. I am well aware how old I am.
Nick: Well forget I said anything (does a zip gesture across his mouth).
Annette: You know this old woman you speak of is the one you said sends your head spinning.
Nick: You're beautiful hunny. I didn't mean it in a bad way.
Annette: Then how did you mean it?
Nick: I don't know.
Annette: I hope you remembered what tomorrow is.
Nick: Sure...How could I forget (has no clue).
Annette: What day is it?
Nick: Don't tell me you've forgotten.
Annette: No, I want to see if you have (folds her arms).
Nick: I don't want to spoil the surprise.
Annette: What surprise?
Nick: If I told you it wouldn't be a surprise now would it (walks away).
Annette: Nicolas!!!
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Post by EarlyBird on Oct 28, 2008 8:12:59 GMT 9.5
Nick: (runs inside and looks at his mother) Mum...I have a big crisis on my hands.
Mum: What's wrong with you? Is it Fred?
Nick: No...It's not Fred. Me and Annette have a special day tomorrow. I don't have a clue what it is. Help me (desperate)
Mum: Hum...I do but...
Nick: But...There should be no buts. We're family, aren't we supposed to help eachother. It's Christmas. A time for giving.
Mum: I'm not telling you. But I'll give you a clue.
Nick: Great (rubs his hands together and beams). What is it?
Mum: It's to celebrate a day that happened many years ago.
Nick: (pulls a funny face) Another clue?
Mum: You both wore white.
Nick: Our wedding day?
Mum: (nods) Now put that together with the years and you'll know what day it is tomorrow.
Nick: I forgot our gold wedding anniversary Annette's gunna kill me if she finds out.
Mum: Just go and get something done so she doesn't.
Nick: Thanks Mum. You're the best (hurries out of the room)
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Post by EarlyBird on Oct 28, 2008 8:28:34 GMT 9.5
Annette: He's forgotten (rolls her eyes and sighs deeply). I knew he would, he always does.
Nick: (walks in and pulls a bunch of flowers from behind his back). Happy early anniversary.
Annette: You rememberd? (beams)
Nick: Of course.
Annette: They're beautiful. Thank you (holds the flowers and smells them).
Nick: And that's not all (pulls out a box of heart shaped chocolates from behind him). Ta Dah.
Annette: You're spoiling me (takes the box and opens them). I'll have one now and then no more till after we've had our tea.
Nick: They are your favourites. Chocolate...Strawberry...Toffee...Fudge.
Annette: Did you get them for me or for yourself? (takes a chocolate and bites into it).
Nick: (goes to take one)
Annette: (slaps his hand away) Oh no you dont. You're on a diet.
Nick: One wont hurt sweetheart.
Annette: Is your mother coming to tea?
Nick: Yes, and so is Fred.
Annette: When is he going to leave? (sighs) I don't want him messing up our big day.
Nick: He wont, I'll make sure of it.
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Post by queenelspeth on Nov 3, 2008 13:25:52 GMT 9.5
Hahaha love it More please |
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Post by Mandy on Nov 7, 2008 17:35:03 GMT 9.5
can you add more please ? |
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Post by EarlyBird on Nov 7, 2008 19:48:22 GMT 9.5
Annette: You better
Nick: (goes to take a chocolate)
Annette: (slaps his hand away) Uh uh uh...You brought them for me.
Nick: Isn't marriage all about sharing. What's mine is yours?
Annette: And that includes everythings except from my chocolates.
Nick: I can stop the diet for one day hunny what's the big deal?
Annette: Once you take a break from it you'll never go back. You need to have your eyes on the prize (pops a chocolate in her mouth).
Nick: (grabs one and is about to eat it when Annette eats it out of his hand). I give up.
Annette: You'll thank me in the long run.
Nick: So you say
Annette: Don't be bitter
Fred: (walks in dancing) Party over here...And party over there, let me hear you scream! (points to Annette and Nick).
Annette: (looks unamused) Fred, what a pleasant surprise.
Fred: Hay Annette not interupting anything am I?
Nick: No No...
Annette: (glares at Nick)
Nick: Yes actually...
Fred: Em chocolate (takes one and eats it). Those are really good.
Annette: (looks at him and rolls her eyes) Nick! Get him out of here. This is supposed to be our special night.
Fred: (realises) Oh...Special night...What special night?
Nick: Our gold anniversary.
Fred: Already?
Nick: Yes now can you give us some time alone? It's just I promised Annette to make this night very very special.
Fred: Hay guys I can take a hint (puts his hands up in surrender).
Annette: Oh good
Fred: Bye (hurries out)
Nick: No where were we?
Annette: (leans in to kiss him)
Fred: (Comes up between them) Just to let you know you have alot of naughty kids this year.
Annette: Fred!
Fred: I'm going I'm going (runs out)
Nick: Now...Where were we again?
Annette: (looks at him and folds her arms) He's kind of killed the mood.
Nick: Don't be silly (kisses her). See
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but when I started it it just seemed crappy to me lol So instead I am going to write the fred claus scene with Mrs claus and everyone featured in the trailer:)Well what I will think the rest would be anyway. Enjoy:)I'm not very good at writing comedy but I thought I'd give it a go 
